My Idea Pitch For "Wrong Number"

This week we will be pitching our final idea for our short films.
My Idea is "Wrong Number".

PRESENTATION:
The Prezi For my Pitch is below:

TRAILER:
For my pitch I made a provisional trailer to give a glimpse of what to expect of the film including exclusive filming from my trip to America, this filming will feature in the film.
This trailer is clearly not finished as it has no other footage like characters as this will be completed soon. The trailer is simply to 'wet the appetite' of the people I'm pitching to.
The trailer is below:


THE PITCH:
Below is the video of my pitch:

THE IMPROVEMENTS:
After my pitch, the judges gave their comments including relevant improvements.
The improvements are:

• Remove the social network aspect- I was thinking of involving social networks as part of the on screen effects. I was thinking of showing on screen the updates the main character makes to his social networking sites. The judges said this would slightly affect the whole plot because texting the girlfriend can have a mistake easily but social networks will be very public meaning the 'real' girlfriend will definitely see the updates meaning it will affect this.
• Slightly alter the ending/last scene- In the last scene, the initial idea was to have the main character coming home and then the girlfriend saying she didn't receive any texts. The judges then said they could improve this by changing the last scene so the main character just arrives through the airport and we seen the girlfriend waiting nervously (because she hasn't heard anything from him), he sees her, hugs her, they walk out, credits roll etc. then right at the end he gets another message as he's leaving which he reads, thinks it odd as its from the other couple, then he realises he's got the wrong number, he ignores it and forgets it ever happened (well, that's what we see). End.